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granite lover: poem

March 24, 2008

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take a ride on the poetry train

I was inspired to post this poem after a week surrounded by Yosemite Valley’s granitic walls…and readwritepoem’s prompt to  GO GREEN… even though I wrote the poem after an experience on Lake Tahoe granite.

Below is a broadside I did for ARTLIFE Limited Editions. It allows you to see how the poem should be formatted (but I am unable to do on a blog yet).

granite lover

granite bites

on the small of my back

warm

me as if you caress there

*

slipping my hand through my hair

i feel the memory of your kisses

sharp presents from you, of you

gorgeous granite lover

*

my hand cool explores

where granite

heats

shoulder knees between my thighs

*

gazing on your sparking face

i desire to

> > > rest upon your lips

> > > lie along your spine

> > > explore your crevices

> > > know what formed you:

explosive hot magma breath crystallizing

country rock scraped away by glaciers

rough epidermous polished to glistening

freckles of lichen splashing gold, green

*

wondering how you feel

soil collecting juniper growing

roots creeping deeper in you

crushed berries scenting you

*

sitting here in leatherette chair

wind caresses you through the window

no sun glows on my face

i’m left watching wondering

*

in what ways has

my soft body

left

an impression on you

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14 Comments leave one →
  1. March 24, 2008 4:09 pm

    Sensual, and full of great “concrete” images (no pun intended!). Or, maybe so….

  2. March 24, 2008 4:30 pm

    Granite lover! A cool concept!

    garbled garbage

  3. March 24, 2008 4:55 pm

    actually, it is a concrete poem in print! good observation!

    when it was published in ARTLIFE for example, I was able t format it so the stanzas go in and out toward the middle of the page like a ridge with the 9 line middle part (the other stanzas are all 4) extends into the center… I’m going to try to work on formatting on the blog hopefully tonight and ge tit so it has the concrete aspect.

    when it was in ARTLIFE, it also had a body painting like you see on how I became the ART PREDATOR…

  4. March 24, 2008 9:25 pm

    I live near a granite-bedrock shoreline, so your poem really resonated with me. Especially these lines:

    ‘explosive hot magma breath crystallizing
    country rock scraped away by glaciers
    rough epidermous polished to glistening
    freckles of lichen splashing gold, green’

  5. March 24, 2008 10:06 pm

    this was very visual, stimulating indeed. liked it.

  6. March 25, 2008 12:55 am

    Short and sweet images all the way thorugh!

  7. March 25, 2008 4:24 pm

    I’ve always been interested in geology, and I loved this!

  8. March 26, 2008 6:42 am

    I think of this poem in the context of Sierra granite faces so I like thinking of it as resonating with you too, Julia, and your shoreline granite!

  9. March 26, 2008 3:25 pm

    I enjoyed the intimate, erotic relationship between climber and rock. Interesting the later specualtion about what impression the narrator’s soft form left on the boulders. Strong middle section too, with all the great words describing rock.

    Thanks for visiting my yoga blog. I’ve been so busy teaching yoga lately, that I haven’t had time to post in a while. One blog is enough, especially keeping up with all the contributions to RWP and other prompts. We can’t do it all, right?

  10. March 26, 2008 3:59 pm

    you’re welcome, Maria Christina! I think we start these blogs in a moment of optimism…the stats for how many blogs are inactive after 6 months is significant. I have 2 other blogs, too –the write alley and art city ventura–and it does keep me busy!

  11. jessica permalink
    May 4, 2008 11:42 pm

    now this is really beautiful. you have a delicious way with words.
    thank you for your comment. i’m so glad you enjoyed it, i will include that poem as my second entry for the anthology. speaking of which, i’m working on the cover right now. was there any text or anything necessary to have on the cover? i’ll bring both a hard copy and a flash drive of it in case we need to make changes to it tomorrow.

  12. amyb permalink
    September 11, 2010 9:02 am

    I absolutely loved this poem. I live in Cornwall, England an we climb mostly on granite there.

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